The Bathing Pond
Harold Knight

Notice of Death: St. Martinville, Louisiana

Miss Evalene Cormier died in her seventy-sixth year, on a warm evening in June
watching fireflies on the front porch of her daddy's old house.

She never married so there are no children here to mourn her passing,
to recall apron strings, buttermilk pies, or the way she smiled with her eyes.

No one to testify to her kind spirit in the Mount Calvary Baptist Church
as the parishioners nod their heads and fan themselves in unison saying "Amen."

No one to know that as a young woman she'd disrobe without shame
to bathe in Ugly Pierre's pond, even when she knew he was always there watching.

No one to remember that she lay with him under the Flower Moon,
that she whispered how beautiful he was while he wept silent tears onto her lips.

There is no husband to lay a trembling hand to rest on the lace of her funeral gown,
loathe to return alone to the warm bed they shared for so many honey sweet years.

No one to understand why she never seemed right again after they found Ugly Pierre
dead in the woods, or why she hated her daddy so much.

There's nothing to say about Miss Evalene Cormier except that she loved watching fireflies.
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From: [identity profile] budhaboy.livejournal.com


very nice.

When my wife was still in seminary (and about a year after) she would do guest gigs at these tiny, ancient rural churches in and around Louisville. Having utterly no interest in the services, I would almost always take time out to wander the obligatory boneyard.

While it was a testament to humanity to see a fifty year old headstone marking the death of some man, and the allusions to the wife and children he'd left behind. What ALWAYS broke my heart was seeing the places left for those he'd left behind still vacant...

From: [identity profile] tully-monster.livejournal.com


Even sadder, perhaps, are the family plots which record a woman dying forty years before her husband, with a row of little stones marking the graves of children who lived only a couple of years, the last bearing the same death date as its mother.

Catelin, was she a family member? A name on a headstone? Or just that painting and your own imagination?
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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com


I think that's the much more common scenario. I know in my own family both of my great-grandfathers (and even the great-greats) married at least twice, both to very young women who died in their early twenties after having several children. As for the piece, I had been reading about public death notices in the old south and looking at some old depression era photographs of some. They used to post them up like fliers in public places. I was doing research for a short story I'm working on and this just came out as a little side venture...the perils of the procrastinating writer! I found the painting after I'd written it.

Oh, and welcome back, by the way. I'm glad you are still here. : )
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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com


I love those tiny old churches that pepper the south. I could spend a whole summer just going through them...so much story fodder, I wouldn't even know where to begin.

From: [identity profile] budhaboy.livejournal.com

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they pepper everywhere...

During the trip to Appalacia in which we bought the moonshine (http://www.livejournal.com/talkread.bml?itemid=433542), I was taken by one of our 'guides' to her family plot buried DEEP in the woods.

I hope I never forget that...

From: [identity profile] notwolf.livejournal.com

'Don't weep for me, i am not there..."


ahv'e mentioned this before, but...
my Momma's gravestone ( which was laid down just this past month) reads "To be continued"


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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com

Re: 'Don't weep for me, i am not there..."


I think that's the best inscription ever. Everything I've read about your mother has a heartbreaking bittersweet quality to it that is so touching. My grandmother is the one like that for me...the one that understood everything about me. I still have entire conversations with her in my head...so she's always around, still nudging me in the right directions. Thank goodness.
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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com


Thanks! I'm still not sure what it will end up being...a poem or a prose piece, but I'm glad you liked it. : )

From: [identity profile] dalibor.livejournal.com


I like poetry/stories that leave room for the imagination. Like, starting an avalanche of associations with just a word or a phrase & then leaving it completely open.... then you remember something from the beginning of the piece, combine these associations, and no 'stringent' Hollywoodesque conclusion to ruin this free-floating process. Just like a French movie, somehow.
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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com


Hey Stranger! I was just thinking about you the other day. I don't have your email or I would have sent you a long rambling "welcome to the club/I'm so happy to see more people getting into law that are not total fucking yuppy freaks" letter....which may have been a good thing that I didn't have it! Ha! ; ) Have you started school yet? The other reason I wanted to get in touch with you is to put you in touch with a friend of mine who's up in that same area. She's the bee's knees. Drop me a line when you get a chance.

From: [identity profile] blackhellkat.livejournal.com

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Cool! My email is blackhellkat@aol.com (or you can use my slightly more professional sounding allison4en6@aol.com if you prefer :) )

I guess I've been a bit slow off the stick to let everyone know what my plans are...right now I'm looking for a job hopefully along the lines of legal research (or maybe a full time job at my new university-to-be so I can get tuition benefits)....probably only for 1 year because law school, for me, does not start until NEXT fall. It was a hard decision but I went with the less expensive University of Maryland. They are building a whole new law school building this year and offered me admission 2002....I didn't want to wait but I felt like it was a better law school than Catholic.

Plus I think I wanna use my time to learn some Spanish/brush up on the poor French skills I do have....I think it'd come in handy.

From: [identity profile] raindog.livejournal.com

Epitaphs


I read this tombstone epitaph in a women's lit anthology:

"She rode good horses
And loved good men."

I'd like to plagiarize it, only reverse the placement of horses and men...

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From: [identity profile] catelin.livejournal.com

Re: Epitaphs


Hahahaha!! Oh, yeah! Well, now you asked for it! Please, please, please...make me the executrix of your will. ; )

From: [identity profile] froglegs.livejournal.com

that is lovely...


I can't remember how I got to you today, but I am glad I did. What a beautiful post and painting! It turns out we have a mutual friend, kudzublossom (http://www.livejournal.com/users/kudzublossom), who I always enjoy reading. I'd like to keep up with your posts so I am adding you to my friends list... hope you don't mind.

From: [identity profile] kalemachka.livejournal.com


Wow! That is a delightful piece of writing. Very vivid. I felt like I was there, and the unspoken speculations left with the reader really clinch it. Brava!

k

From: [identity profile] nandan.livejournal.com


I loved it. Very spare, a bit of a plot twist, a lot for the imagination to latch on to.
Thanks!
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