Everyone's a Critic

[catelin]

Got these comments back today on a poem that I wrote (Formica), which almost made it to publication but got the ax in the final round.

1 -- not enough bite for the poem. was a little bored waiting for it to
happen.
2 -- Really lovely. I love the triviality of tinkering around and then all
of a sudden, what the poem's really about comes out. Good impact. Images
are nice.
3 -- This poem attempts to build tension but fails to do so effectively.
The lyricality seems strained (reflecting / the speckled pallor/spread
underneath / our plates), and the end aims for cleverness but lacks punch --
largely because the rest of the poem falls short of the necessary build-up.

Oh, well. Back to the drawing board.

Comments

[strike-anywhere.livejournal.com]

as well you should.

hmmmm

[verian.livejournal.com]

no.1 is complete bollocks if you don't mind me saying. I can not comprehend how anybody could be bored reading this poem. It isn't long enough to get bored for goodness sake. Oh, I feel a rant comimg on, I better go and lie down.

Re: hmmmm

[catelin.livejournal.com]

Ha! I was wondering about that one myself. This is the first time I've gotten "editorial" comments back and I was a little confused. I couldn't tell if they were all from the same (manic) person or not. I think they are probably comments from three different people. I hope so at least! Otherwise, I'm not sure what to think!